David Larkin is a lawyer and college classmate who lives in Phoenix. He is a voracious reader with an independent perspective on almost everything, so I respect his opinions.
I really enjoyed reading your book! I could have read another 100 pages easy. Nice story. Read it quickly and didn't want to stop last night but had to to get up for work. Plot flowed along. Good resolution. Built nicely to the end and didn't have to tie everything together quickly like some bestsellers even have to do. I liked all the characters. I have a real nice picture of that part of Boston in my mind and the culture. I think it could sell well if marketed properly, like all the popular art and music these days. I guess getting the attention of the major publishers is the tough part.
Couple of unsolicited small points for your future revised best seller edition: Arthur makes a comment about people seeking him out at the Brown Derby. The Brown Derby and its progeny were closed in the mid-eighties when I lived in LA, 1985 or so. So it didn't ring true to an LA person. You could substitute the Ivy (as in "Get Shorty") or some other hip spot. Also, I don't think your first page of introductory comments about the book and Four-Letter Words are really helpful, seemed dated and gratuitous and not really true. The story really starts with Sandy Beach. The profanity could turn off a reader at an agency or publisher unnecessarily. Instead of thinking about shit, which I naturally did, I think I would rather have a first impression of fishing. Don't get me wrong here, I liked "Goodfellas" and "Scarface" alot, so profanity itself is not a problem for me, like my wife or my mother, for example, but they're girls. The profanity in the story itself seemed to fit the characters and the situation. Possibly a cerebral Woody Allen type film in there as well.